HW 17- Supportive Comments on Blogs

Kate

Hi Kate,

I liked the metaphor with the strings to show how people are so connected with the digital products that they use.

Wall-e and Feed connected well with how the technology we use affects us. For the opposing viewpoint, what maggie suggests could work. Part of your argument is that its fake, so some parts of it could be real... Is it possible to have a real "moment" chatting online? What makes it fake the fact that it is not seen in nature but produced by humans? Just a suggestion if you decide to explore that kind of opposing view point.

I didn't know that about the updated Oxford dictionary. That was an interesting tidbit to include. You can relate that to our own vocabulary and see if you notice yourself using more words relating to technology or nature.

For your sixth paragraph you said, even though Violet was chained down with digitization she was able to loosen those ties, you can give an example of what ways she did that and whether or not people can do that today.

The job point was good, since most of the time, having technology is basically a requirement for a job, even in school. Look at what we're using to write our essays on. That really shows how entangled it has become with our lives.

In general spell check some words, but great start. There's alot of info and I think it can be edited down to be more concise.

Jia Min

Helloo Jia min,

I liked how you cited Feed and Wall-e to back up your statements. The specific examples are good, like when comparing the slang to the shorted words that are used in aim or talked about how your mom examines the fruits and vegetables before buying it(my mom does the same thing...she smacks the watermelons though -.-'').

In general, relate back to your thesis to say how it shows we are losing our traditionalism like why/how is "looking at the things other people have experienced and put it as one of our experiences and knowledge" different from how it was done previously. You do a good job of showing how efficiency is winning out but show what traditionalism is losing or being replaced also.

For the opposing point of view you can use EBIG4Y to cite how it makes you smarter.

The thesis is good, but could be edited to be more clearer. (I know mine does too....=.='') "Digital representative devices are losing the traditionalism that we have and brainwashing us with the word "efficiency"". Are the devices losing traditionalism? Clearly indicate what/whom the traditionalism applies to.

This is a good start, you have specific examples and cite them as well. Countine adding examples if needed. Looking forward to see how you'll continue it ^^